Topic: I wrote this about my frandd
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Infectious Member Posts: 423 |
Tear it apart with comments/things that should be changed. I have to improve my writing skills before August 31st. /: Entrapped. These burns, this pain, These cuts, no gain. Heartless. Those people, their actions, The reality, the reaction. Miracles. The love, the truth, Their happiness, to sooth. Alone. The past, the retrogression, The future, our progression. | |
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Infectious Member Posts: 423 |
By the way: I'm aware that sooth and truth don't rhyme. | |
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Infectious Member Posts: 423 |
): *feels unloved* | |
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ッTinkerbell ッ Schöne Katastrophe Moderator Posts: 955 |
hey hey hey I actually like it Don't see anything wrong with it Just the sooth and truth rhyme thing | |
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-- ♥I'm only up when you're not down, don't wanna fly if you're still on the ground & I'm only me when I'm with you.♥ Like the paranormal? http://spirits-from-beyond.webs.com
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Dreams Moderator Posts: 1356 |
Awweee, why?
..and this is sad! : ' ( | |
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-- "The best thing about dreams is that fleeting moment, when you are between asleep and awake, when you don't know the difference between reality and fantasy, when for just that one moment you feel with your entire soul that the dream is reality, and that it really happened"
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ッTinkerbell ッ Schöne Katastrophe Moderator Posts: 955 |
and when i read this again, i read it to the tune of "My Black Dahlia" lol | |
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-- ♥I'm only up when you're not down, don't wanna fly if you're still on the ground & I'm only me when I'm with you.♥ Like the paranormal? http://spirits-from-beyond.webs.com
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Infectious Member Posts: 423 |
She was in a mental hospital at the time, coping with some issues. I wrote it out of inspiration. Haven't really written anything since.... | |
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Infectious Member Posts: 423 |
I wrote it listening to that... | |
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ッTinkerbell ッ Schöne Katastrophe Moderator Posts: 955 |
lmao, that's just odd You wrote it listening to it and I read it in the tune of it lol | |
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-- ♥I'm only up when you're not down, don't wanna fly if you're still on the ground & I'm only me when I'm with you.♥ Like the paranormal? http://spirits-from-beyond.webs.com
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Dreams Moderator Posts: 1356 |
my god..
..I like it. Nothing wrong with it | |
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-- "The best thing about dreams is that fleeting moment, when you are between asleep and awake, when you don't know the difference between reality and fantasy, when for just that one moment you feel with your entire soul that the dream is reality, and that it really happened"
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